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Now,because many graduated in the society,there are competed to them to find a job.So they try their best to get certificate,they think that the more,the better. More and more students are fond of getting more certificate during their campus time.In their opinion,if they have more certificate,which will secure them have more competition.They use their time completely to get certificate,they even don't think about it,whether the certificate is useful for them or not.The only thing in their mind is to get more of them,then they can find a better job ,and they will be more competition in the society.Sometimes the certificate is become a way show off,you know,they will think that they have so many certificates,they can have the world. But in my opinion,I think maybe the certificates are important for us to find a job,but the first thing we should find out clearly,we are going to find a job that we like,not a job that conform to the certificate we get,and in our mind there must be a clearly way that what we want in the future,so for the goal to get what certificate we need,not all of them.So many certificates will be a burden to us.At this point,it is not the more,the better.