- 分享到:
作者能较灵活地使用词汇表达，但学术词汇的积累还有很大的空间；很好的运用了从句，但部分句子稍有瑕疵；全文结构较为严谨；请提高文章内敛性，段落和句子要围绕主题展开。
Now,because many graduated in the society,there are competitive for them to find a job.So they try their best to obtain certificates,and they think the more certificates they obtain,the better future they will have. More and more students are fond of obtaining certificates during the period of their college life.In their opinions,if they have certificates,what will secure them have more competitive.They utilize their daily time to obtain certificates,and they rarely think about them whether the certificates are useful or not.The only thing in their mind is to get more of them,then they can find a better job,and they will be more competitive in the society.Sometimes the certificates become a way to show off,you know,they will think that they have so many certificates,they can have the world. But in my opinion,I think maybe the certificates are important for us to find a job,but the first thing we should find out clearly,we are going to find a job that we like,not a job that conform to the certificate we get,and in our mind there must be realize that what we want in the future,so for the goal to get what certificate we need,not all of them.So many certificates will be a burden to us.At this point,it is not the more,the better.
