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I want to said a story when I was younger. my math's grade not good, but i enither talent nor have basic of math. I do not want to give up the leasson if I also want to go a famouse university for attend classes. after three month I concentrate to learn math, study practice and requier question for classmate, finally classmate feel amazing i can get the very good grade, before I obtained 98 grade of math in mid-exam, so classmate felt i is a talent of learning math.