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on internet celebrities in the recent years .it is show a lot of internet famous person because a many difficult reasons in addition nowadays internet is very speed developed .have people think internet develop is go a many people think internet is down yet. many different reasons contribute to this situation :among them internet is very open it is shown a lot of good and bad information .people is would like read and study .internet have a lot of knowledge.we can read a lot of book and communion. you should good friend . moreover but have many people use internet go their purpose upload a lot of bad information it is vulgar culture .besides the public ability is very bad . in my opinion internet is well it is study a lot of knowledge but we should have good ability no be use bad people
