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内容：本人在12月15日到22日在纽约举行的展览会期间了解到贵公司产品号为5670的新产品，非常感兴趣，请贵方发给我们一份价格单和说明书。感谢贵方的合作，希望我们可以建立贸易关系。
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1．price list and instruction价格单和说明书
2．establish business relationship建立贸易关系
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From: hubin@163.com Date: Dec. 26th, 2008 To: KPOHsales@hobnail,tom Subject: To establish business relationships Dear Sir or Madam, I known that your company has a new productor orderd 5670 during the exihibition between 15--22,12.I am quite intriested in it and we hope your company will send a piece of price list and instruction.thank you for your coopart and wish we can establish business relationships
