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With our country have more and more close relationship with other country,we pay much attention to the English,because all of us think that when we learning English very well we can go broad in future ,so that's phenomenon :some student in shool are ignore to learning Chinese.What's caused that? One of the reason is English is more and more important for our social,so as a student ,who hear from his parent and teacher,we should pay attention to study of English,as Chinses is meaning of nothing to us.In fact,that's wrong act to every students.Having a try,after 50 years,we can't speak Chinese any more,and our culture was lost,how can our country to threngthen itself?Depend on English? So,in my point of view,when we take our time to study English,at meantime,we should be to the study of Chinese.