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What the fucking Excessive Packaging.It suck. Why should we buy these bullshit? We are wasting money! We suppose to use these money in something more valuable,such as supporting the poor area, buying food and clothes for them.I believe its insanity that human being are pursuing something do not make sense. That is ridiculous!