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请作者增加学术词汇的使用，不过单词拼写做的很好；可适当增加文中长句和复杂句的使用；文章采用了适当的过渡词和衔接词，结构比较严谨。
Yesterday was a fabulous day I remembered. Honestly speaking, it was hard for me to get over last week. Because there was a great deal of problems for me to solve. However, freshman as I was but there were too much homework which pushed so hard that I almost couldn't stand it at once. So I decided to come back home to get some relaxation. Not until the train stopped at the railway station did I realized that I was home again. Stepping into my room, I couldn't help feeling a sense of familiarity. At that time, I began to realized how much I missed my family. After enjoying super with my parents, we chatted and shared experience with each other. In addition, then, I talked about my school life which might attract them the most. By the way, in my eyes, my parents are always concerns about me very much, and I'll always tend to them for some advice if I meet some problems that I can't solve instantly. At the end of our conversation, my mom suggested me not to think about the terrible things which worry me the most. As we all know, family comes first, so I'll always cherish my parents. On the other hand, no matter how difficult the obstacle in front of me is, I'll try my best to get over it.
