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Nowadays,creating a green campus has become more and more important.It not only aim at green surrounding but also include many things.On the one hand,taking it for an example,among students and teachers are friendly.for example,studendts should respect their teachers.on the other hand,we should form a good habit of studying. Therefore,we should take more attention to creat a green campus.to begin with,we must protect our environment,secondly,we should take a corret attitude that get along with our classmates and friends.It is high time for us to creat a green campus.