拼写很棒,可适当增加学术词汇的使用;文中有几处错误的句子,部分句子偏简单;衔接成分太少,文章结构欠佳。
Nowadays,With the development of society and economy.Studying on line has become more and more popular.Different people have the different views about it.Some people hold the opinion that there are more efficient in learning English.Moreover,it brings more comfortable to us in our daily life. Howeve,the others don't think so.They think it is important for students to learn.Many of them are addicted to playing computer games online.Fewer and fewer students take more energy to work and study. As far as I am concerned,we should take a correct attitude that using the internet.