有效地采用了多种衔接方法,层次清晰;可适当增加从句的使用;作者能较熟练、灵活地使用词汇,建议要多使用学术词汇。
nowadays the internet makes our life more convenient,which help people work,shopping and even make friends .for such a convenience the chances for people to have interpersonal communicate are less and less. on the one hand,people are always busy working and there's little time for them to communicate with others in person and even for a walk,thus the internet make the room for those people ,and the internet make the distance shorter between persons who are in defferent places.on the other hand,as people are talking with those who are far away they do ignore the persons near them.what's worse is that they spare less and less time for talking with those who are in accession. as far as i'm concerned,i'd like to keep in touch with my friends who are far from me as well as communicate who are more approachable to me.after all, we can not bear one day we only communicate on the internet.
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