有效地采用了多种衔接方法,层次清晰;注意文中出现的部分句子错误;文中词汇表达稍欠丰富,注意文中少数拼写错误。
After graduation if u want to go further aboard ,it is good for u to learn about the world . some students, think it is a good chance to learn language and can know more about the foregn culture . while other students think it is too young for them so they may be can,t afford it i think maybe it is not a good choice for them.