小学一年级英语作文:Good friend

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I have a best friend who is a common girl, moderate looking, not tall, but full of passion and love to others. She has black and long hair and two big black eyes and good voice. She like playing computer game, chatting with WeiXin on mobile phone. She has bad temper and sometimes will be fury to someone or something. That is terrible. Though some shortages has she, I still like her. Her passion always affects me, let me dive into my study. Her laugh vioce let me focus on her.