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I have a best friend who is a common girl, moderate looking, not tall, but full of passion and love to others. She has black and long hair and two big black eyes and good voice. She likes playing computer game, chatting with WeiXin on the mobile phone. She has bad temper and sometimes will be fury to someone or something. That is terrible. Though some shortages has she, I like her. Her passion always affects me, activates me to study hard. Her laughter let me focus on her.