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The Dragon Boat Festival The Dragon Boat Festival ,is also known as Duanwu Festival ,Duanyang Festival and Wuyue Festival and so on, which is one of the most important traditional festivals in China. This festival originates from the nation's memory of famous patriotic poem Quyuan and in ancient time when people avoid or prevent petis on the day every year. For the long history, there are many activities existed to celebrity the day.The most important ones are Dragon Boat competition,eating zongzi ,inserting dogwood leaves and wearing colorful strings and so on.That a story relating to the dragon boat.Quyuan was said to plunge into the river to die.Being afraid of hurt of fishes ,native people poured the zongzi into river to feed fishes by boats with dragon patterns. But nowadays with the development of catering trade,more and more merchants relate the festival to commerce.The majority of people regard it as a special day to relax ,eat or shopping,there being few people remember its truth.Until occurs the ridiculous application of the list of world heritage in South Korea,did the nation startled and started to value th e festival. Remember that traditional festivals are the vital parts of our national culture,Do not forget it.