2011年6月英语四级作文真题:网上购物

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talking about the go shopping on online, some people will have many of words to to say in the subject .so did I.With the development of modern society under the helping of technology and knowledge. I still believe that go shopping on online has been a tendency of new model .of course why so many people were fond of it.the reasons as follow. More and more people is benefiting in shopping on online ,because of they though that it is convenient to do something according to your way.and the neglect has emerged that lots of people were addicted to go surfing all the day .Amount of people start staying in chamber In my opinions .anything has its bright side and black side .we must respect those facts and learn the good points from it.