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my school named second senior middle school.it is on the first avenue in county.it was established at 19th on june in 1985.it has only two beuldings ,one is teaching beulding,the other is dormitry.it has a big playground,we play football and basketball there.many bueldings were founded later,and many teacheres were broght in too,some of them were foreigners.but i have no chance to see them,because i have already graduated since 8th june in 2004.how i wonder to come back to see my alma mater again