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hello,everybody! I am glad to be here to see you ! first of all, I will make an introduce to others. My name is Alice, i come from Chengdu Sichuan. Now,i am a student in English system. I enjoy making friends , so ,i think i can communicate with others every well.Besides, i am very enthusiastic ,i want to help people who in need.What is more, I once worked for a company , and i have a advantage to control some difficult situation. If i succeed, in my opinion , our school need some changes .first,we can built a learning program for some student who like communicate with others and people who are loose interesting in study . In this way, students will develop an interesting in study.Of course,i am suppose to try my best to help people in our school.That is all,thanks for your listening.