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God is my friend,he teach me what make people.He give me salfty .He tell me more massage from balle.Now,i find he and hope to make friend with him.He is not a people,but he have a power enger.The fact,i'm not rember he when i work or i happying,but when i have bad ,i can rember he and look for his help.