2012年6月英语四级作文真题:过度包装的现象

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On Excessive Packaging Nowadays,many goods have a phenomena of excessive packaging in our society.Honestly,I think that this phenomena will be bad for our society development. Why our society exists this phenomena?First,it can satisfy the mental needs of the customer to demand good things.Scond,it can get more benefits to the businessman by this way. In my opinion,excessive packaging will case waste to materials and money.So,I advise that we should avoid excessive packaging and use gree packaging.