Source: Bureau of Labor Statistics, Current Population Survey.
文中衔接词和过渡词使用的很棒;文中一些从句的使用为文章增色;文中词汇较灵活,但要注意积累学术词汇,拼写错误也要注意。
According to the chart,it is clear that the rate of unemployment in 2001 is decreased following the increasing of education pays ,but ,the earnings of median weekly is increased following the increasing of education pays.So, I think knowledge is of great importance in the carrer. First of all ,we begin to learn at an early age so that we can find a good job ,which means we have higher earing to live comfortable life.Secondly ,if we spend much education pays ,we will have more knowledge and the ability of competition, the company can conserve much money to train me ,because I was trained in the school.As a result ,the more education pays ,the more lower the rate of unemployment and higher the earning of median weekly. With the development of the modern society ,it is certain knowledge is power ,so ,We should sudy harder from now on ,only in this way can we have a better life .