单词拼写做的很棒,还请注意增加词汇的积累;可适当增加从句和复杂句的使用,注意文中的几处句子错误;上下文衔接欠佳,文章层次欠清晰,建议加强连接词和衔接词的积累;请提高文章内敛性,段落和句子要围绕主题展开;请注意分段;连词使用偏少。
Memo From:LI Ming Date:December 23 2008 To:Mary Chen Subject:To hold a party Hello,Mary! i'm Li Ming.It's time for me to go to Beijing for business, and as a result,i can't talk about the new year'day party with you together.Please inform me of the date and place which you decide on and the preparation we need. yours, Li Ming