2012年12月英语六级作文真题(II):人与电脑

请作者增加词汇丰富度，增加学术词汇的使用，改正文中拼写错误；建议平时练习中，多多背诵一些好的句子和文章；全文结构不够严谨，文中很少使用衔接词和过渡词；连词使用偏少；请注意分段；请提高文章内敛性，段落和句子要围绕主题展开。

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