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With the development of society,a lot of couples only have one child,so more and moe parents do anything for kids. For example,the 12 age of child or even more old but can't wash clothes and dish.And,I saw the reported that a university student with his mother goes to school and live together,why? How a reason amazing that the university student can do nothing in the daily life,he must need his mother.I can't envision what would happen in his future. In my opinion,the parents should teach their children do something by themselves when they were young.Wash the clothes,do the dish and cooking,sec.And don't forget to educate about aspect of thinks,its most important.After all,the parents can't do everything for them all the life.