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Nowadays,students health is being cared,especially their mantal health.As the society grew ,there are more and more accident caused by students' phsicalogicalthought.Therefore,it's essential to educated themselves well,not only for ownselves,but also for the society. After all,school is the leader,which is regarded as the holy palace.Thus,it's the best zoon to cultivate their noble mind.Encourage students to do what they are interestd in as possible,hold health lectures very often,or open up series of events are effective measures to keep healthy. Furthermore,students themselves should doing something,too.No matter what difficulties you are in,don't give up without being stugguled.to have a good mood at any time is the best way to keep you healthy.