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TO:Mary Chen From:Li Ming DATE:23th OCT. 2008 SUBJECT:Party on New Year. Hello Mary Chen,I'm sorry to tell you that I can't talk about the New Year Party with you.Because I will evect to BeiJing a week. So,I want you to inform me something of the party .Such as time,place,some prepare and so on.Thank you.
