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A recent survey, carride out by a Beijing-based information company,has shovn that two thirds of the Chinese college students today favor the idea of saving money for later use, Whereas quite many others deem it much better to tomorrow'smoney today.personally, I side with the former. Firstly, saving money can relieve one 's anxiety in case of accidents disease or other mishaps.As we all know,when one faces such tragedies as fir damage of fatal disease, one would need a large amount of money to survive such difficulties.Secondly, saving money can give one a sense of fulfillment.since most people work hard every day, they will be quiet happy and satisfied with his achievement when they find they have accumulated a large deposit in the band.Thirdly,saving money allows one to give a helping hand to others .With money available at the moment , one can offer badly needed help to those in temporary diffivulty,say,those who are suffering from flood, famine, a car accident, or things like that .Yet taking a loan from a bank is often too costly.Thus,m the timely help eill be rewarded with gratitude.A dependable friendship will eventuall be forstered. To sum up, saving money does have many advantages. Indeed, it is important aspect of the Chinese conception of virtue.Therefore, let's start saving money from today on.
