字数:200满分:100分
过渡词很丰富,衔接词同时使用的恰到好处;作者句法基本功不错,可适当增加从句的使用;作者词汇表达较多样灵活,也能较准确地使用学术词汇。
In judging from what is demonstrated in the above table,if we look hard enough,we can observe tangibly that it describes some significant differences in terms of income source between American students and Chinese students.Obviously,only 50% of American students's income comes from parents whereas Chinese students is dramatically 90%.Correspondingly,American students can earn a lot of money from part-time job and followship or scholarship,which occupies 50% of their total income while Chinese students is merely 10% in the same way. When seeing the situation,perhaps we have no better way to appreciate the not uncommon phenomenon than by studying the following influential factors.In the first place,small wonder,American students depend on their parents less than Chinese students in mind.Therefore,they usually intend to expand their source of income actively.In the second place,we have no doubtful evidence that American students can gain part-time jobs and scholarships easier than Chinese students in that the colleges of American can supply more opportunities to them.In the third place,in the final analysis,the economic situation of America is better off than China over the past decades thus,American students can find a part-time job with ease. I would not go that far nevertheless,we have no difficulty but can obtain a conclusion that it is with the rapid development of the economic and society of China that Chinese students can acquire more and more opportunities to expand their source of income rather than relying on their parents primarily.