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With the development in economic as well as internet, online shopping has insensibly crept into our everyday life and become a fashion among Chinese people, which in turn stimulate the thrive of online retailers such as Taobao and 360buy. Today, there are all kinds of online retailers such as online book retailers and appliance retailers, which means there is nothing we cannot buy online. It's hard to say whether it is a good thing or not. On the one hand, shopping online means more convenience and less expense, we're able to quickly seek out what we want among millions of various goods on the internet in stead of walking around the mall for several hours. On the other hand, the convenience for shopping is, so to speak, a stimulation of purchasing desire. People are more likely to buy something they don't need when shopping has become easier, thus it is unfavorable to people's personal finance. In my opinion of view, shopping-online per se is a good thing. What we need to do is control our purchasing desire and learn to manage our money in proper way.