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The college years are the best time in a person's life Many successful person always due to their college years,they think themslves be exchanged when they at that time. Because,in that time,we all are purity,we consent on how to study and how to go in futul.wo do things go on with our palent. A lot of person give views that show they meet their lover a life.At college,we meet our co-oprater in bussiness.our bester friends ware first chating at college. In my opoin,I should celebret my college.I meet my lover,I do what I want,I think many my life in futul.