文中用词稍显贫乏,在词汇拼写也要再接再厉;可适当增加复杂句和从句的使用;过渡词和衔接词使用欠丰富,层次欠清晰;连词使用偏少。
The college years are the best time in a person's life Many successful person always due to their college years,they think themslves be exchanged when they at that time. Because,at that time,we all are purity,we consent on how to study and how to go in futile.We do things go on with our plant. Persons give views that show they meet their lover a life.At college,we meet our co-oprater in business.our best friends ware first chatting at college. In my opoin,I should celebrate my college.I meet my lover,I do what I want,I think more about my life in futile.