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As we all know, internet is playing a crucial part of our daily life in the contemporary society. Whether when we are on our job, or on the rest. Of course,it give us so many conveniences ,however,there are some disadvantages, too. There are several reasons to account for its advantages. Firstly, nowdays we are live in a competitive society , people are so busy on their work that they don't have time to communicate with each other in time.Don't worry!The internet could help them to keep relationship with relatives or friends. Secondly,we don't have so much time to go shopping on the supermarket, no problem,we could buy all kinds of material which you want to.And doing shopping on the internet could help you save money and time.So internet is an effective way to solve these problems. Whereas,as an old saying goes,every coin has two sides.Internet also gives us so many disadvantages. First of all, chatting with friends on the internet also make a gap between us and our friend.They don't have to communicate with each other face-to face.What's more,I am afraid that there are not so much warmer in our society,that's a horrible thing for all of us! So in my opinion,We should use the internet correctly.Don't spend extral time on the internet.We should spend some time on our relatives and friends.A real word need us !
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