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I agree with the statement that car have the greater effects on society than airplanes.With the increasing number of building of highway,and having enough money to buy cars for our ordinary people,we prefer to choose cars as the transport instruments for our daily life. It's so convenient that help people a lot.Whenever you go out for a long trip or just a short distance,it's always comfortable to you,and the most exciting point is you have choices between drive yourself or not.Of couse ,you must have been verified you can do it .Comparing with car,airplane is too giant, too expensive,people simply choose it for a long distance or something in urgency.There is no one who take an airplane twice or three times in one day,but it can not be more common for taking a car. Car have a gerater effects on society than airplane result from its more likely to be use.