作者词汇量积累很好,学术词汇积累要重视;采用了简单的衔接手法,行文流畅;可适当增加从句的使用。
I agree with the statement that cars have greater effects on society than airplanes.With the increasing number of building of highway,and having enough money to buy cars for our ordinary people,we prefer to choose cars as the vehicle for our daily life. It's so convenient that using the car often helps people a lot.Whenever you go out for a long trip or just for a short distance,it's always comfortable to drive a car,and having the choice whether drive yourself is one of the exciting things.Of course,you must have been verified you can do it.Comparing with car,airplane is too giant, too expensive,consideration all kinds of reason that people simply choose it for a long distance or something very urgent.There is no one who take an airplane twice or three times in one day,but it can not be more common for taking a car. The car has a greater effects on society than airplane result from its more likely to be used.