小学一年级英语作文:Jim's family

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My name is Jim.My family of mother、father and brother.Mother and father is famer,and brother is a student.I work at a car factory.Mother、father and brother living in old city and I living in my wrok place.I have tow chance to go home every year.It is sping fasterwer and high temperture day.I like my family and I hope they can miss GOd.