可适当增加长句和复杂句的使用;过渡词和衔接词使用的比较不错;作者能较灵活地使用词汇,学术词汇使用较恰当,但存在一些拼写错误。
Doing a good deed is always encouraged in current society.That not only shows the improvement of person's behaviour,but also claims the development of our society.There is a controvative debate that whether one should expect a reward when doing a good deed. Some people are in favor of expecting a rewarding for doing a deed.The reasons are following:First,doing a good deed deserves a reward ,then expecting a reward is completely appropriate.Next,the reward they gained can encourage more such good behavior. On the contrary,some people believe that we should regard LeiFeng as our learning model,so neglecting the reward should be advocated.Besides,ther may be a phenomenon that a perpon do a good deed in order to a reward. It is common that people from different background have various ideas.As far as I am concerned,the point is the behavior of doing a good deed.We should consider doing a good deed as our duty,then our society will be wonderful.