文章词汇表达丰富,学术词汇积累做的也很棒;作者句法知识很棒,适当增加从句的使用,会取得更不错的成绩;层次不清晰,几乎没有使用衔接词。
Some argue strongly that great deeds deserve recognition and acclaim.In this selfish and materialistic world,it is vitally important to recognize and promote various noble deeds.Rewarding and encouraging good deeds helps set an inspiring example to the public. The opposing view is that we should perform good deeds without expectations of any outcomes or rewards.Acknowledgements and credit shouldn't be given people who do good deeds with mixed motives.For example,some entrepreneurs supporting charity aims at the reduction of tax instead of lending a helping hand to others with a real motive.So we should do something good for others like Lei Feng without expectations of any economic and immaterial return. From my perspective,doing good deeds in exchange for rewards isn't an offense.We merit them.In fact,receiving sufficient public praise and attention serves as a contributing force behind the widespread promotion of good values.A role model sometimes outweighs a sole good deed.