2005年1月英语六级作文真题:对病人进行捐助

文中词汇表达比较多样，能多用学术词汇就更好了；作者句法知识很棒，适当增加从句的使用，会取得更不错的成绩；行文稍显不流畅，应增加文中衔接词的使用。

Li is a boy who comes from parent family,and whose mother is working very hard for him going to college,and Li always does part-time job during the weekend.Li studies very hard at college,and he is the monitor of the class.And now he is ill,and his condition is very serious,who should take an operation as soon as possible. His mother endeavors to borrow money from their relatives.And she is working very hard to make money,and who does whatever she can to collect enough money for the operation.But the money is far enough.He is not only need money for operation,but also need someone to take care of him.Even though his mother hopes take care of her son,and she should collect money,too.And Li expects someone to help his studying. As this condition,we hope the society and our classmates will help him to pull through.So we need your help now.Please contact us if you want to help him,and we are very thankful for your kindness.