作者词汇基础不错,在学术词汇的积累上还要再接再厉;文中应适当增加从句和长难句的使用;过渡词和衔接词使用的比较不错。
So great is the pressure people suffer every day, that we are becoming increasing anxious and can no longer lead a peaceful life. We are disturbed by a variety of troubles—the trouble with study, the trouble with work, and the trouble with love. It seems that there are so many things amiss that we can’t keep a good mood at all. However, I believe that we must keep a good mood no matter how hard it is. Here are some reasons why it is significant to be in a good mood. First, a bad mood will certainly do harm to your health. A recent survey has revealed that people with bad mood are more likely to fall ill. In contrast, a good mood is quite beneficial to people’s health. Next, keeping a good mood makes you charming and attractive. People prefer those who are always cheerful and delighted rather than those who draw a long face all day long. Wear a smile and you will find yourself are easily accepted by others. Moreover, your emotion also has an effect on people around you. Therefore you ought to keep a good mood so as not to affect others in a negative way. Last, instability of you mood can make it difficult for you to concentrate on work. As consequence, the working efficiency will be slower than usual. I can’t conclude this article with several kernels of advice: try to be positive and energetic as long as possible; just speak out when you feel unpleasant or upset; release the negative feelings instead of burying them in your heart; get rid of bad temper if you have any. To which I’d only add: smile when there is sunshine.
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