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My friends, she is an optimism, lively open and bright girl, that keep smiling confront with all things.she's smile look like the sunning give us happy and friendship. Her smile always can let you never get out of the happy mood, whether it's life or study. She will encourage you when you are sad, when you are happy to share with you . This is my good friend.