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On the Importance of a Name As we all know,everyone in the world has a name,and sometimes we have the same name as others,whith is very common in our sociaty. Some people think the name is unimportant.Why?Many people have the same name,so when we call them they may confused whom we call.However there are many people oppose to this.They think name is of great significance.Although someone may have the same name to the other,it has diffierent meaning. From my point of view,a name is a great way to distinguish people in some way.Every one has a name named by our parents.