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Nowadays,Internet has been more and more importent both study and work.It is a product of the development,so it has played an importent part in people's daily life. Now some people think it can make our study or work with much high rate,but a number of people also think it has many harm becase it can make the yungers put their heart into its magical space so that has a heavy effect on their study.The thought about it is becoming more and more heavy. For above the clusion,I think Internet has more adventage than its disadventage.Becase it get much using in the technology and people's life.It has been a necessary product in all over the world.If without it,soial will not develop in the fueure.So only need our way that using the Internet are right,we will get much profit on it.