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Nowadays, with the development of the internet technology , online shopping has become a popularity in our daily life. As we all know that online shopping brings us lots of conveniences that we can buy the original good that we want without going out the house. However, every coin has two sides. Online shopping brings us problems while it brings conveniences. For example, some people bought the fake product, some can not get the good after paying for the cost online, and so on. Actually online shopping is full of dangers. While you pay for the cost through the internet, you personal information is easy be exposed. And your money in your card might be easily stolen. In my point of view, although online shopping consists of dangers ,we don't need to be so worried about it. What we need to do is making sure that the online shop is worth trust, and your paying environment is safe.
