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Nowadays, the phenomenon that students pursuit for famous brands has become more and more common. The purchase with famous brand has become the first choice when student shopping. More seriously, some students with famous brands may look down upon those who with normal brands Many different reasons contribute to this phenomenon. Among them, the comparing minds plays an important role. Besides, companies with famous brands usually invest more money in advertisement, which stimulates students to buy their products. In my opinions, students should not pursuit for famous brands because it will cost a lot of money that came from their parents’ hard works. Moreover, it’s not a healthy mind that comparing with others. Therefore, students should choose the products with suitable functions instead of famous brands.