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Today I want to talk something about animls. Yesterday I went to zoo with my prents. How large zoo is it. We saw something great. I went to a snake park, saw a girl is giving some meat to the snakes. The snakes don't want to ate them but the girl was still give food, such as the banana and vegetables. Then I went to the tager park,there was a tager is taking photos with visiters.oh what terrible. In my opining I think a animks don't want to play with peaple. they are friendly of us, so we must be good for them, too.