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A flower is in the full blossom without being ruinde by the rainy day because of protection fromthe greenhouse.Nevertheless,the forcing rain distroys it immidiatly.If we see the flower as us who are under the patrents' protection competely like greenhouse does.Maybe,some implications of two drawings we can demonstrated in our life. The message conweyde in the picture seems to be that too much protection makes us can't stand suffering sa stepping into society.Too much cosy enviorment gives birth to lots of promblems around us.Such as laking of abilities to suffer hardship or solve some problems by ourselves and so on. Adversity is the touchstone of the strong,just as fierce fire is that of gold,Seneca determined.Lisa Ray,the internationally famous actress,had suffered cancer six years ago.She has never giver up and made fundation for patients like her.Eventually,she not just wins the campaign between she and the cancer but also gets married and has a happiness family.So let's go out of the "greenhouse" to expose to the natural environment as early as we can.