文中词汇表达用的较灵活,同时能够较恰当地使用学术词汇;句式变化较为明显,可适当增加从句的使用;行文稍显不流畅,应增加文中衔接词的使用。
It is fortune that earth provides enough to satisfy every man's need,and that make everyone live in a happy life to get what he or she wants.However,someone's need is tremendous,to get more,they become more and more greedy,and they take what the earth provide for granted. Example that oil is not only essential to the transportation,but also a good source for trading business to make interests.Consequently,some businessmen ignore the limite of oil's amount,they are full of interest in their mind.That is a negative illustration to the future.At least,earth would not offer the things forever. As far as I'm concerned,earth provides enough to satisfy every man's need,but not every man's greed.Please keep an eye on the impact of the earth's future.