希望作者可以加强词汇表达多样性,尤其是学术词汇的积累;作者句法知识很棒,适当增加从句的使用,会取得更不错的成绩;可适当增加连接词和衔接词的使用;请注意分段。
When someone asks me: What is your Chinese dream? I will answer it without any hesitation: to be a good doctor. The reason why I want to be a doctor is that I want to save people’s lives as possible as I can. When I was young, I had a terrible car accident. Thanks to the doctors, they brought me back to life. From then on, to be a good doctor has always been an inspiration to me. I will study hard to make sure that my dream will come true in the future.