文中词汇表达贫乏,但是单词拼写做的不错;在平时练习中应增加词汇量的积累;层次不清晰,几乎没有使用衔接词;请注意分段;可以适当增加副词的使用;连词使用偏少。
hello, my name is Lucy King. I come from the UK. I am thirteen years old. I like sport, music, and movies. I want to make friends with chinese girls, I wish we have same hobbies, and help me learn chinese. I can teach you English, if you wish. please write a letter to me, I am looking forward to seeing you.