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My Self introduction My name is ChenYulu and my English name is Catherine I am a girl I from China I am a good pupil I am good at speaking English and good at reading I like singing I like shopping.I like my friend very much These friends are very nice Iam thin and fat.I am have a black hair and small and big eyes I am very fun. life Every Day I Get up at half pass six.I had Breakfast at Seven o'clock。I Want to go to school on foot .I had luch at twelve o'clock.tonight I am go to the park with my parent .I am back at eight.I Finsh my homework at nine o'clock.I love my home very warm. ` . ..